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18 May 2007 @ 10:52 pm
Stareleon  
Looking over Stareleon again... I think I need to work on the beginning. Once you get into the story, it moves along nicely, but the beginning is kind of off. Also, I think I need a reason for Bob to have wandered so far from home, aside from just getting lost in the dark. Maybe something magical? Or something which draws his attention and makes him follow it. Hm... Perhaps I could even have more of a reason for King Sower to go to his neice’s kingdom. And I may need to work on the exposition so it doesn’t seem so exposition-y. I wonder if that’s part of why the beginning seems kind of disconnected from the rest of the story.

Edit: Now I’m redesigning my world. Maybe there’s just a huge forest in the south, and then mountains to the east and possibly west too... But then I have to look ahead to if I make another book in the series and plan accordingly. Oh, bloody. And where can I put the castle and Bob’s house so that they cross paths while the King is heading north and Bob is heading to the forest? The castle would probably have to be pretty close to the forest then. Shouldn’t Bob live by the forest though? I mean, he is a woodsman.
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Rev: Johnny Traunt - reverie_shadow on May 19th, 2007 09:19 pm (UTC)
Don't you just love it when you're trying to think up a new beginning for your story? Considering that it's a very important part, since you have to find a way to draw your readers in. So I get where you're coming from there.

What's your story about? If you don't mind my asking.
Marianne: Writingresplendentposy on May 20th, 2007 12:07 am (UTC)
It's my children's fantasy story about a cat who stumbles upon a new land and then must save the king from the humans. I have to set up the world in the beginning, but I also want to draw readers in to the story. And I'm trying to rework some details like which direction my characters are going and where certain places are situated. Also, what motivates my characters, which may be influenced by where they are.